User talk:Death

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The story I posted is a story that floated in my head one day and then was gone I have my momments like everyone else.For those of you who can see the story for what it might be go for it.I hope there is someone or a group effort to add to the story.I have another that I have tried to write but could never finish i will add it as soon as i rewrite it I lost it in a computer crash.I deal in horror because everyone else is better at the good stuff lol.Have you ever had a story no matter how long it is,in your head and you can't seem to find the end to me that's what these stories are they are my nightmares so come on in and share the fear.

--- I did some minor editing for the first few paragraphs of your story. They are basically style editing. I didn't do the whole thing because that's not my expertise, and honestly I hate doing it, even for my own works. What I was trying to do was, hopefully, to show you a way of presenting your thoughts which I believe is slightly better than the original form, although I can be dead wrong :)

I'd suggest that you try doing the same thing for the rest of the story, breaking down thoughts from actions and dialogs, displaying the situation and mental pictures, and, you know, give more white space to unpack the paragraphs a little. Let me know if you want me to look at them again.

Regarding yourself, how you lived through those tough times can already make it a great story. I know I'd love to read about them. However, putting ideas together to form a story is not the easiest thing to do in the world. My first ever story (about 13k words) took about two months and 7-8 revisions before I had the gut to show it to anyone. Finishing a story is one of the toughest part of writing. But, sometimes a story without a solid ending can be as good, or even better, than a story with a perfect ending.

Cheers, --Bingain 15:27, 17 Jul 2005 (EDT)