Talk:Mother and Daughters
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The story seems to be moving along quite nicely. My only criticism of what has been added so far is the "Request for ideas of what you'd like to see." I feel this is unnecessary at this time. If someone has an idea, add it in. If you want to make suggestions, please use this page. I'll be updating this page when necessary.
I don't see what difference it makes but this works also. Like you with this section I was going to moderate the other section.
Watch your grammar and puncuation. I don't mind doing minor editing. But I don't like having read and at time re-read stuff to make sure that the grammar and puncuation are nearly correct. If you have questions, ask for help. From me or someone else.
- Scratching head* I should watch my grammar and punctuation? Sorry to break it to you, most of the things you fixed were your own words. I make no claims to being perfect myself but I thought I should just point that out.
Really. Here a two examples of the poor grammar (or wording of a sentence, if you prefer) and puncuation THAT I HAD TO CORRECT. They are changes that you made to my text.
Example 1:
Kate continued pumping her fingers in and out of Lauren's snatch, Patty licked up a storm all over Kate's lush bush, both girls climaxed together.
This should be two, if not three, separate sentences, as stated. If you want them to be one sentence, a slight modification of the wording is needed.
Example 2:
Rhonda then laid down, with her head between Jenny's legs, she began to rub Jenny's pussy with her fingers.
Again, this is either a poorly worded sentence, or a sentence or two that have poor puncuation.
Hopefully, this will illustrate what I was referring to. Am I perfect? No, not in the least. But I work very hard to make this sound and read correctly. I acknowledge that you have probably correct a few of my mistakes. But I have had to rework your contributions, so that they flow more smoothly, from one sentence to the next.
My statement was and still is a commentary for everyone that contributes to this story, not just you. I'm not trying to turn this into a "pissing match". I'm just trying to make this story the best it can be. If you read what you put into the story, and it makes sense to you, fine. But if it doesn't, work at it. I know that I certainly do.
As a final note, remember that I can and will pull this story if I feel that it is becoming to big of a problem for me. I really like the direction the story is moving in, and would hate to stop the forward movement we have going. But I will shelve it, if need be.
I feel that you contributions have added a certain dynamic to the story that I may have not achieved on my own. But this project can also be disheartening, when I have to figure out the best way to say what you most likely were aiming for. The two examples are just a few of the situations I've had to work on.
OK, yes I would agree these examples were pourly worded, problem is I didn't write that section.
If you didn't write it and I didn't write it I guess there is another contributer sorry for jumping on you. I too don't want this to be a pissing match.
