Talk:Getting Started with Alice: Chapter Two

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I think it is quite stupid to suggest that Alice has "massive bulk" and is therefore unable to even masturbate! She has such a lot of sexual adventures that if she were as fat as is suggested, they would be nigh impossible! Let's just say she is a large paerson - big tits, great shape to her ass etc - but not ugly fat. I shall take all that out. There is also a lot of the little girl having very adult thoughts: it is much more erotic to have her being innocent, as the story suggests at the beginning. It shows that the whole tale has not been thought through.

I have also split it up now, and will cut down all those huge paragraphs, which make it unreadable. They don't make it any more erotic either! I may even cut out the scat: we'll see. Personally I find that a complete turnoff - surely these belong in another section of erotic srories anyway. Pglen 09:20, 11 April 2007 (EDT)