Talk:Getting Started with Alice: Chapter Three

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I am going to cut those huge paragraphs, and make the story more plausible as well. It may well be that I shall cut the entire thing down - it is just boringly repetitive. I cannot believe it has to be this long!!! Pglen 01:46, 12 April 2007 (EDT)

As a further thought - why do we have to add the Diane-being-treated-in-that-way section? It almost seems as if we have to include every single sexual pecadillo, just for the sake of it! The whole story is far better if it just the awakening of the family to reasonably normal behaviour of an incestual nature. Like I said in the first part - it is most erotic when we awaken Milly, Mary and Diane to the newly-awakened ideas of family sex, without all the additional things which might well come later, but not yet. The whole thing is just written without any theme at all. It also seems that the one male in the tale is getting all of it - and how he keps it up is beyond me! Pglen 06:17, 12 April 2007 (EDT)